In my Lit class this week, we have also been looking at poems, but more importantly, how to write them. My teacher showed us a really neat tactic of writing a poem. He had us pick an emotion, then an event you'd experience this emotion, and then write a paragraph about it. Once you had written a paragraph, you cut out unnecessary words and made it into the structure of poem. I chose the emotion 'Excitement' and the situation 'Amusement Park'.
This is what I had done:
I walk through the gates of the amusement park, taking in the smells of buttery popcorn and tasty snacks. The rays of the sun beat down on my back, warming my body as a move through the crowed space. Entering the line for the roller coaster, I hear distant screams of the riders before me. Anticipation runs through me like a trickling brook, flooding every nerve and thought. I pass the old tired ticket man my crumpled ticket, and step onto the coaster. Making that slow vertical climb to the top, a smile creeps up my face as I enjoy looking down and watching the people down below turn into ants, scurrying around. My stomach flips as we fly down the tracks. A scream of excitement escapes my lips , but is lost in the bellowing 'whoosh' of the wind.
And then I converted it (as best I could) into a poem:
Walking through the gate,
I take in the smells of buttery popcorn and tasty snacks.
The rays of sun on my back
warming me as I move through the crowed.
In line, I hear distant screams.
Anticipation runs through me like a trickling brook,
flooding my every nerve and thought.
I pass the ticket taker my crumpled slip.
Making that slow vertical climb to the top,
a smile creeps up my face.
Looking down, watching the people below turn into ants
scurrying around.
My stomach flips as we fly down.
A scream of excitement escapes my lips
but is lost in the bellowing whoosh of the wind.
So this was my week! I learnt a lot about poetry and am really excited to learn more!
Until next time! (with hopefully another tasty trial to share!)
Melina
I've commented on the voice of your posts before, but another thing that makes your blog so readable is how you share specific examples, especially samples of your own work. This post includes reflection, and it shows your own poem AND part of the process used to develop it. That is great, selfless sharing that can help you and your readers. We all learn more about how something works, about how to do it ourselves when you share process and product. Thank you, Mélina. Remember this recipe for a great post.
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